X2X's debut promo.

X2X's music hits, and a limousine drives into the entranceway. The driver walks out and opens the back door. X2X steps out with a long coat on over a pair of golden tights, and makes his way to the ring. X2X looks to be about 6"2, and 250 pounds. He looks at the fans' outstretched hands, and simply walks past them. He enters the ring and gets a microphone as his music stops playing.
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X2X: Well, well, well, is this a packed building we have here today?" X2X says, looking around the arena. "I think it is! Hey, the more people here, the more cash I get in my pocket! And boy, do I love cash... Anyone here like cash, too?"
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The crowd cheers slightly.
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X2X: "Come on, who here likes cash!?"
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The crowd starts cheering.
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X2X: Well then... Who wants to make some cash, right here, in this ring, tonight!?"
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The crowd is popping loudly now.
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X2X: Hey, hey! Kid!
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X2X points at a boy in the second row.
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X2X: I hear you yelling pretty loud! Security, bring him over the rail!
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The security give him a boost over the rail, and he walks up the steps and into the ring. He looks about 5"9, and sixteen years old.
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X2X: Hey, how's it going? Enjoying the show? What's your name kiddo? Where you from?
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X2X says to the boy, pulling one arm around him.
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The boy: My name's Ryan, andI'm from right here in the good old U.S of A!
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X2X: Good for you, good for you... Now, someone told me you like cash. What would you say to... $500?
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Ryan That sounds pretty good to me!
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X2X: Well then! You seem like you're in pretty good shape Reese, reckon you can do a push-up? Go ahead, give it a shot.
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Ryan gets down and does a full push-up, and springs back up. The crowd cheers again.
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X2X: Hmm... That was pretty good... But do you think you can do... Twenty push-ups? Tell you what, you do twenty push-ups, in one minute, and then you have got yourself a nice, big, fat, wad of cash!
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Ryan: I reckon I can try, let's do it!
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X2X: Alright alright! Let's get a timer up on the screen guys!"
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A timer with "1:00" appears. Ryan gets down in a push-up position.
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X2X: Okay Robbie, when you're ready!
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Ryan begins doing push-ups. He keeps a steady pace for 45 seconds. When he reaches 16 push-ups with 15 seconds to go, X2X gets a worried look on his face. 18 push-ups, 10 seconds to go, and X2X sweeps out one of his arms from under Ryan. He hits his head on the ground, and doesn't rise back up. The timer hits 0:00, and a buzzer sounds.
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X2X: Oh! What a shame, you were close! If you didn't slip... Ah well!
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Ryan gets up looking angry at X2X. X2X walks into his face, with about six inches on him.
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X2X: Something wrong...?
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X2X says menacingly into the microphone, looking down at Ryan. Ryan slowly backs away, and climbs back over the guard rail, as X2X's music begins playing again.

nice but add some colour and instead of something something sayed X2X try i ike this

X2X: hello U.S of a

yeah add some color and do as max says

"Well, well, well, is this a packed building we have here today?" X2X says,

X2X: "Well, well, well, is this a packed building we have here today?"

mm something like that

This is a good RP, I liked it very much. You told it as if it were a story, and that's good, but RPing in this game is pretty much like writing a script. So instead of writing "X2X says, yadayada", try writing X2X: Yadayada.
Just like they said.
Maybe the RPing rules and format would help.

RPing Rules and Format - READ OR DIE BITCH

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This is a good RP, I liked it very much. You told it as if it were a story, and that's good, but RPing in this game is pretty much like writing a script. So instead of writing "X2X says, yadayada", try writing X2X: Yadayada.
Just like they said.
Maybe the RPing rules and format would help.

Ah, I see. I used to do writing for E-Feds al around the internet and what i've done here is more or less what i'm used to. I wrote a story on a game once in scripted comedy, so i'm still accustomed to it .

Do you need me to change this promo into script?

Yes please
I was re-formatting it for you (only this once) but my power got cut off and I was too lazy to restart again.

There we go, is that alright?

MUCH better!
Although for the actions, you could leave it the way it is, no need to colour it.
But as for the names in the actions, you can colour it.

Alright, i'll do that in future. Cheers!

Thanks, this RP will be added into the next show.

Sweet! Do you want me to make an RP for the next Saturday show or is nothing planned yet?

Nothing is planned yet. Even for the Tuesday's show, not much has been planned.

Ah, alright, no worries. I'll cross that bridge when I come to it.