max tells off demonic knights ( for pvp )

the fans are still excited about the last match then suddenly a roar of music called unforgiven by metallica as the fans cheer for there hero

felix: ok i finialy get to see a good superstar besides scar

darren: good *sign* more like terrible or stupid slob lol

felix: SHUT UP YOU WORM!

darren:* starts to cry* you don,t have to be so mean

felix : shhesh i am glad i told you off

darren: shhoushh max is starting to talk

Max righteous: WHHOO!, hello newyork are you having a good time

the fans yell at the top of there voices* YES! *

Max righteous: good but i have some bad news demonic knights are here

the fans * BOO! *

Max righteous: now now there only children in a mans world

the fans chuckl

Max righteous: any way i think demonic knights should grow up wow you can bash some one 3 on 1 what a a complishment you should be proud i know people get bashed for talking bad about DK but i am not worryed because before i joined B.W.B i was street fighting plus a officer plus even in the army so i have fought in wars

the fans cheer for there hero

Max righteous and also guess what every one called me , MAD MAX
thats right i was mad max in the movie and in real life so DK come on down i dare ya fools

the fans cheer as Max calls out the demonic knights

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demonic knights you can reply or mabey walk down and try to bash me but Scar felix and some on else could help me ?

This is pretty good, but a general tip: Avoid using words like "lol". Just replace them with *Character laughs*, or something along those lines.

Make sure you use proper punctuation. It takes longer but trust me, GMs will fall in love with people who do.

um we are both boys so i don,t wont him to fall in love with me

max righteous wrote:

um we are both boys so i don,t wont him to fall in love with me

Hahaha, I was joking. I meant that he would take more notice of people who use proper grammar, and probably have greater confidence in you if he knew you could carry feuds with your storytelling.

Your storytelling is really good. If you have good storytelling, you're doing well. If you combine that with good grammar, you're doing brilliantly.

So X2X have you made yourself an RP for the shows? if not then chop chop. It's unhealthy to be infatuated with Max like this... He's contagious

I was getting to it... Haha, i'm not sure of the impact it'll have, but I guess i'd better get around to it

max righteous wrote:

um we are both boys so i don,t wont him to fall in love with me

I love Scar...

Scar wrote:

So X2X have you made yourself an RP for the shows? if not then chop chop. It's unhealthy to be infatuated with Max like this... He's contagious

lol